Hey , what do you think of this poem i wrote , its a littlle long?

Overall I think its very good. Lots of great combinations of words, such as "mind embled" and "sleepy tunnel" and "years wash against my door". You need to stay focused on these types of images and get rid of some of the more cliche imagery (although there isn't much of it). Clean up the wordiness and overall I think its REALLY good!! Tons of GREAT images. Its an honor to have you on my contact list :)